Mini Golf with Mum
"Yay!" I shouted when Mum told me we were going to play golf.
It was a sunny Saturday morning and Grant, mum and I went to golf.
I hit the ball softly because I wanted it to go into the hole. The ball rolled slowly towards the hole.
"Please go in the hole" I whispered to the ball. The ball almost went in.
I hope we go back there again so I keep trying to get the ball into the hole.
By Lindsay Ashby
kia pai Lindsay try and be more specific I like the way you said you went with your mum.
ReplyDeleteI like the way you used lots of detail Lindsay.I think you need to work on your punctuation
ReplyDeleteIt sounded like a good game!
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